According to the article “The Perils of Over-sharing in Social Networks”
by Emm (2014), Internet security has effects on many aspects in our lives. Many
people feel uncomfortable about being monitored by authorities. Since the
Internet has become an integral part of our lives, this made us susceptible to
threats due to high accessibility of personal data. Posting on social media has
more negative effects than just showing to counterparts, where sometimes can be
used for evidence of unfavorable outcomes. Also in a corporate context,
over-sharing can lead to leakage of business information thus pose a threat to
organizations’ survival and profitability. However, there are several steps
that everyone can take to reduce vulnerability to threats.
In our daily lives, many depend on the Internet heavily on personal or business purposes. Many fancy functions such as check-in, tagging, and liking that supposedly be social sharing functions have been exploited by people with distorting purposes. For example, revealing your current location in a fancy night club with a group of friend by tagging photos or checking-in locations, making yourself known that you are currently not at home. Some who got to know your home location would pay a secret visit, resulting in burglaries and even robberies in real life cases. I have been warned not to post any photos such as boarding passes and passport at the airport, because that would make everyone who follows me know that I am going overseas and someone can do unfavorable things. Personal safety issue is the main concern for over sharing.
Many of us nowadays, including me, resort to social media to gain recognition in what we do, such as academic, activities and work. It is true that posting such contents online will sometimes jeopardize one’s credibility, work confidentiality and sometimes even reliability. One shall not reveal his or her own life to the extent that it can become evidences that will turn against themselves. Emm (2014) mentioned that “If you post a 'morning after the night before' selfie on your Facebook wall…but what if your boss sees it, thereby discovering why you didn't turn up for work today?”I felt the same like the author because of real life experience of mine that I could not turn up in school the next day after a night’s drinking with friends. I was in a difficult situation as the school had caught me through social media and took disciplinary actions against me. One has to be responsible in what he or she posts online, and try not to make it to turn against them even though for that moment it is glorifying by high number of likes and comments.
However, I disagree with the author over privacy issues. One could actually set privacy over the content that they are going to share, be it open to public or open to friends only. If one could control the privacy well enough to allow which group of social media friends could see which kind of contents, the risks could be reduced. Also, the author mentioned leakage of business information that could potentially cause profit loss in companies, this might not be the case. Companies’ internet is stricter than those we get to access at home or in public venues. Together with data protection technologies and code of use of technological products, it is actually extremely difficult to leak any business data from the inside. Logging into social networks like Facebook is almost impossible.
In general, this article caters to readers with all kinds of Internet environment. The motive written here is highly desirable by the society, provided that there are many people who do not have Internet safety knowledge. Yet given differences in Internet environment controls, personal usage may not be a huge concern. Therefore, I have a few disagreements with the author but I do think his article will be insightful for many Internet dependents nowadays.
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Emm, D. (2014). The perils of over-sharing in social networks. Retrieved fromhttp://www.huffingtonpost.co.uk/david-emm/the-perils-of-over-sharing-in-social-networks_b_5005276.html.
In our daily lives, many depend on the Internet heavily on personal or business purposes. Many fancy functions such as check-in, tagging, and liking that supposedly be social sharing functions have been exploited by people with distorting purposes. For example, revealing your current location in a fancy night club with a group of friend by tagging photos or checking-in locations, making yourself known that you are currently not at home. Some who got to know your home location would pay a secret visit, resulting in burglaries and even robberies in real life cases. I have been warned not to post any photos such as boarding passes and passport at the airport, because that would make everyone who follows me know that I am going overseas and someone can do unfavorable things. Personal safety issue is the main concern for over sharing.
Many of us nowadays, including me, resort to social media to gain recognition in what we do, such as academic, activities and work. It is true that posting such contents online will sometimes jeopardize one’s credibility, work confidentiality and sometimes even reliability. One shall not reveal his or her own life to the extent that it can become evidences that will turn against themselves. Emm (2014) mentioned that “If you post a 'morning after the night before' selfie on your Facebook wall…but what if your boss sees it, thereby discovering why you didn't turn up for work today?”I felt the same like the author because of real life experience of mine that I could not turn up in school the next day after a night’s drinking with friends. I was in a difficult situation as the school had caught me through social media and took disciplinary actions against me. One has to be responsible in what he or she posts online, and try not to make it to turn against them even though for that moment it is glorifying by high number of likes and comments.
However, I disagree with the author over privacy issues. One could actually set privacy over the content that they are going to share, be it open to public or open to friends only. If one could control the privacy well enough to allow which group of social media friends could see which kind of contents, the risks could be reduced. Also, the author mentioned leakage of business information that could potentially cause profit loss in companies, this might not be the case. Companies’ internet is stricter than those we get to access at home or in public venues. Together with data protection technologies and code of use of technological products, it is actually extremely difficult to leak any business data from the inside. Logging into social networks like Facebook is almost impossible.
In general, this article caters to readers with all kinds of Internet environment. The motive written here is highly desirable by the society, provided that there are many people who do not have Internet safety knowledge. Yet given differences in Internet environment controls, personal usage may not be a huge concern. Therefore, I have a few disagreements with the author but I do think his article will be insightful for many Internet dependents nowadays.
649 words
Emm, D. (2014). The perils of over-sharing in social networks. Retrieved fromhttp://www.huffingtonpost.co.uk/david-emm/the-perils-of-over-sharing-in-social-networks_b_5005276.html.
Language
返信削除There are several grammar, punctuation and awkward phrases that could be avoided with checks done on the language
- Multiple grammar errors. In chronological order from the introduction onwards, the mistakes are capitalised. These are just some of the errors.
o ‘this HAS made us susceptible’
o ‘leakage of business information, thus POSING a threat to THE’
o ‘many depend on the Internet heavily FOR business’
o ‘and liking, that supposedly ARE social sharing functions,’
- In the 4th paragraph, maybe a paraphrasing of the ‘this might not be the case’ to something like ‘BUT this might not be the case’ would be better.
Summary: what is the significance of the reference to people feeling uncomfortable about monitoring by authorities?
返信削除Second paragraph: No need to mention business purposes if the focus in this paragraph is on usage of social media for personal purposes. Elaboration on the peril of oversharing is clear, however it’ll be good to mention this right from the start of the paragraph instead of only mentioning in at the end.
Third paragraph: Good that you started off the paragraph with your main point on the harm of oversharing in the academic scope.
Review team members: Ryan, Lijun, Lixin
This is a good effort, Zijian. You seem to express the main gist of the article in your summary. In that summary, however, there seems to NOT be enough reporting verbs to show that these ideas are not your own. Look at your classmates' summaries as examples.
返信削除In the response, you have lots of detail, but I'd like to see a clearer thesis previewing the stand in your response.
As for language use, there are sentences in the summary with problems:
- Posting on social media has more negative effects than just ****showing to counterparts,**** where(?) sometimes can be used for evidence of unfavorable outcomes.
- Also in a corporate context, over-sharing can lead to leakage of business information ***thus pose**** a threat to organizations’ survival and profitability.
In the next paragraph:
-- Many fancy functions such as check-in, tagging, and liking that supposedly ***be**** social sharing functions have been exploited by people with ***distorting purposes.****
-- your current location in a fancy night club with a group of friend by tagging photos or checking-in locations, making yourself known that you are currently not at home. >>> Why do you use YOU? That is conversational, not academic.
-- such as academic, activities and work > lack of parallelism
3rd paragraph
--- One shall not > (wrong modal verb)
-- because of real life experience of mine > because of MY real life experience
4th paragraph:
-- Also, the author mentioned leakage of business information that could potentially cause profit loss in companies, this might not be the case. > run on sentence
--- In general, this article caters to readers with all kinds of Internet environment. The motive written here is highly desirable by the society, provided that there are many people who do not have Internet safety knowledge. Yet given differences in Internet environment controls, personal usage may not be a huge concern. > unclear expression....
Content-wise, shouldn't you differentiate between a person who is an Internet user and one who is using social networks? The author certainly does....