According to the article “The Perils of Over-sharing in
Social Networks” by Emm (2014), Internet security has effects on many
aspects in our lives. Many people feel uncomfortable about being monitored by
authorities. Since the Internet has become an integral part of our lives, this
made us susceptible to threats due to high accessibility of personal data.
Posting on social media has more negative effects than just showing to
counterparts, where sometimes can be used for evidence of unfavorable outcomes.
Also in a corporate context, over-sharing can lead to leakage of business
information thus pose a threat to organizations’ survival and profitability.
However, there are several steps that everyone can take to reduce vulnerability
to threats.
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返信削除With regards to the content, most of the sentences are copied wholesale without the use of paraphrasing or quotation marks. Also, the thesis is not clearly stated. The main points are not put all together in a sentence to form a thesis but spread throughout the summary.
返信削除Organization wise, the article was not very clearly summarized and some ideas were not clearly presented. For example, in the 'Posting on social media ... ...' line, it could be rephrased to a more concise line.
The language used, we felt, was slightly awkward as some words were inappropriate used. The copying of the lines from the article seemed to affect the English in the summary.
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